Board Thread:Suggestions/@comment-28398720-20160530022622/@comment-27794543-20160724105928

It needs a bit of cleanup but overall it looks great.

Within the main "Trigedasleng" page, I think the "The language" section may be a bit too technical - instead move it to the 'grammar' subpage. The main page should be for a fandom reader getting background info and how it was used in the series. Move the 2nd & 3rd paragraph of the lead to "Language Info" section and add For links to vocabulary & grammar pages there.

"Trigedasleng/Vocabulary" looks great. I would remove the heavy styling on common phrases section – it just makes that one section stand out too much (perhaps just use indentation like in other sections). In the "See also" section add link to grammar page. (Also, at end of lead add separate paragraph with sentence along the lines of "For pronunciation, see guide .")

"Trigedasleng/Grammar" might need a better name. I view this page being the technical page for those interested in the linguistics behind the language (perhaps "Trigedasleng/Linguistics") that is beyond the interest of most fans. The title "Grammar" doesn't really cover pronunciation and other info. As mentioned above, I'd move the "The language" section from the top-level page to this subpage. The "Common Words and Phrases" section should be merged into the vocabulary page. The "Proper Names" section should include the paragraph, a few examples, and then a For link to Trigedasleng/Vocabulary#Names (instead of repeating all of the names). In general, it just needs to be cleaned up to be focused on the language rules, rather than on individual words or phrases.

Overall, it's great. Would you be alright with others editing your draft page or do you want to make changes there yourself?